Feedback from our own class

-Missing shots worked well
-Photoframe shot was good when it was still then started moving
-Police sirens/radios were good and the statistics spoken
-One of our titles was 'Based on a true story' - different and effective
-Pretty clear what it is about
-Laughing at the beginning abit too unclear and maybe too much of it
-More like a trailer - with loads of bits and pieces involved
-Could have not as much stuff in it
-Narration needs to be cut out

FINAL VIDEO

final feedback

Questions we asked:
1.Do you understand whats happening?
Most of the people we asked answered yes, they understood it was based on three girls that go missing and that it may be a carry on of the last girl.
2.What are any improvments?
One group were confused about the suspects and which one could have been the killer. some didnt like the close up of the mouth at the end and think the scream could have been cut out to leave the final girl talking. It was also commented that too may flashes were used and there were not enough location shots. The title could also have been smaller.
3.What worked well?
The voice overs especially at the end and the photoframe shot was effective. The suspect pictures and missing shots worked really well especially with the girl talking over at the end.
background noises worked well, girl talking at the end carried it on.
4.What didnt work well?
Titles too big.
5.What is/isnt effective with the sound?
Fits really well with the whole feel of the piece. real voices and sirens used were clear end effective. fits well and effective.
6.Any further questions?
How did you do the voice overs?

Questions we asked:
1.Do you understand whats happening?
Most of the people we asked answered yes, they understood it was based on three girls that go missing and that it may be a carry on of the last girl.
2.What are any improvments?
One group were confused about the suspects and which one could have been the killer. some didnt like the close up of the mouth at the end and think the scream could have been cut out to leave the final girl talking. It was also commented that too may flashes were used and there were not enough location shots. The title could also have been smaller.
3.What worked well?
The voice overs especially at the end and the photoframe shot was effective. The suspect pictures and missing shots worked really well especially with the girl talking over at the end.
background noises worked well, girl talking at the end carried it on.
4.What didnt work well?
Titles too big.
5.What is/isnt effective with the sound?
Fits really well with the whole feel of the piece. real voices and sirens used were clear end effective. fits well and effective.
6.Any further questions?
How did you do the voice overs?

Feedback on Final video

-How does the film use genre conventions?
It has Murder!!! Killers good.

-Can you catergorise the film opening into sub genre?
Slasher

-Could the film pass for professional work and why?
Possibly, it's good but sound needs sorting out

-What do you think will happen in the rest of the film?
Person will come after her, will either find her friends or see them dead, will kill person or die

-How does the music create atmosphere? Does it do it effectively?
Radios and sirens good, the talking explains the story, think you have should of stopped at last line - no scream

-Mise-en-scene
The mixture of props such as the missing pictures, maps, mug shots etc, really give this an authentic feel. Also think the use of black and white footage is indicative of events that have happened in the past, which is effective and relevant for what it is about. The laughing does detract from the quality of the piece a little bit, but other digetic sounds such as the siren and screams worked well.

Rough cut

Postive Feedback - Good props, convict board was good, map was good, good in the forest, the screen was good, picture frame close up was a very good idea, pictures at the beginning was good, good panning shot, good steady shots, scream at end was good.
Negative Feedback - Frame shot needs work, isn't properly in order yet, picture in frame needs to be longer, steadier shots, dark/fuzzy at the start, shorts are too quick, not clear at the beginning, could cause confusion or epilepsy, sound was jumpy needs work. props and costumes are unsuitable, narrative bit unclear.

Rough Cut

Suspect pictures

Throughout our sequence there will be flashes of supects, and eyewitnesses. These pictures will help us organise how we want these images to look.

Missing people statistics

We will be using missing poeple statistics at the end of our sequence, as the view is the picture of the four girls again we will have a voice over repeating these statistics.

- In a 1999 study Newiss found, across three sampled police forces, that the average number of missing person reports filed in that year was 3.6 per 1000 people in the population. (Newiss, 1999). Calculated for a UK population (as at mid 2006) of 60,587,000, this gives an estimate of 218,113 missing person reports every year. The total number of missing person reports each year is likely fall in the range of 210,000 to 230,000 in any one year.

- have estimated that at least 100,000 children go missing every year, or “one every five minutes”. (PACT, 2005: 18). Several studies have found that young people, aged under 18, account for around two thirds of all police missing person reports. This would suggest that the number of people under 18 reported missing each year could be as high as 140,000 to 153,000.

-Between the ages of 13 and 17 years, girls are more likely to be reported missing than boys. 71 per cent of 13-17 year olds reported missing to Missing People (1999-2000) were female.

Examples of what we hope our newspaper articles will look like.

Although some of the content in these newspaper articles are irrelivant the style used is not. these kind of articles give us ideas as to how we can present our newspaper articles. For example we can highlight certain areas, cross some out and write overtop of some.

This is an example of the kind of missing people posters we could have on our prop white board. However it wont be as bold as this, blut slighty more creepy and atmospheric.

Map ideas

We are using maps so we can annote them, giving a stonger sence of mystery. We will circle certain areas, highlight certain streets and places that 'the girls' were last seen.

Here are a few examples of maps we could use for this:

voice over list

we will need voice overs for the following:
-laughing girls
-police/radios/reports
-camera clicks
-eye witness people saying what they think they seen
-family members crying
-people screaming
- police sirens

prop list

We will need the following for our props:
-a cork board or white board
-newspaper clips/ headlines
-missing girl photos x 3
- suspect photos
-eye witness photos
-maps!!!!

Our basic idea for prop board

Ideas for fonts for our title

Feedback to Intricate Simplicity

-Firstly, the music was said to be haunting and sad at the same time which added to the 'missing girl' effect.

-Our idea was said to have lots of potential which could consequently make our sequence really good.

-the use of photos, onto video's and back to photos creates variety, along with diegtic noise creates an atmosphere.

-our ideas were straight forward and easy to understand

-Our title was said to be very effective, its unusual and contradicting. when people read our title they will not automatically know what the film is about, therefore intreiging viewers to watch on.

- Our music was commented on in a negitive way also, however this is due to the fact our music was too short and we had to start it again half way through the animatic. On the real sequence our music will be low and run all the way through without pause.

thanks =)

Our animatic for Intricate simplicity.x

First ideas:

Title: Intricate Symplicity

-4 girls are friends
-3 of the girls go missing 1 gets away
-showing flash backs of happier times as them as friends.
-after pictures the scene goes to the missing girl pictures, newspaper extract, maps, anitations etc.
-4th girl talking over top of police reports which will consist of,'no evidence found, We have a suspect' ect and paparazzi shots for exmaple journalists shouting 'do you know where they are? do you have any evidence!?' ect
-4th girl talks of statistics of missing children '10,000 children go missin everyyear'
-or 4th girl talking over a picture of the 4 girls- close in on 4th girl as she says something like ' i see my friends die, now hes coming for me and its my turn'
-if effect possible - picture of her burns/crumbles away then title pops up.

-ideas for sound? we need to use mainly diegetic sound like police voices and sirens, girls talking, mums screaming, there will maybe be a very quiet low music only audiable before voices and during the girl speaking.

-where will you shoot? our sequence will not require much filming out of college time therefore most can be filmed within college hours.

-what will you need? props-whiteboard with photos, maps, costumes- white shirts with tie.

-who will be in it? all of us will be in at - in photos.

-what problems can you forsee? maybe being a bit too short, might not be able to flow that well and be as clear to audience what is going on.

-when will you shoot it?

Silence of the Lambs

The first intial thing is that it is set in a forest. It is quite dark and eerie which sets the thriller genre. There is a lack of action which i think helps engage the audience. It also helps contribute to the cold and dark feeling of the forest. Ive learnt that the opening sequence doesnt need to be full of action to grab the audience's attention.
When we see the female character we do not know aht she is doing in the middle of the forest and we dont know why shes running. This builds up the tension and mystery. We then realise she is on an obstacle course and is working for the FBI.
The titles stand out as they are quite bold and big but a simple font has been used. They are in black which is dark and blends in with the thriller genre.
Diegetic and non-diegetic sounds are used within the sequence. The music had no lyrics and was mainly contained low pitched instruments. I think that this introduces the eeriness to the scene and makes the audience feel on edge. Birds flapping are then introduced and trees whistling. The music and sound effects have a great impact on the audience and this is something we will need to look at closely when making our thriller seqeunce.
Leanne

'36' student thriller

Rachel and Leanne
The music (piano) becomes diagetic. the close up of the hands is effective, shows you who is playing it and that it is their own original music used.
The story line is really clear but is left with a cliff hanger and the thought.."Why has she been shot? Who has shot her?" The effects used in the dancing shot are really effective, we would like to develop a few ideas used for our own thriller sequence. The bus shots didnt fit in with the story line maybe they could have shown more of the killer/piano player? The light at the end was a bit out of time with the shooting sound. The contrast between the beginning and the end of the sequence is shown by the music suddenly changing from calm piano to a deep heartbeat sound which we think worked really well.

Amber&Leannnesmusic

We started this term by being introduced to two new programmes. Final cut and Garageband. Final cut is to be used for editing our sequence and Garageband is to be used to make our music for our sequence. On final cut we learnt how to import images and videos and how to cut and edit them. We also was taught how to add music over the top. In the practice session we made a short sequence of differnt landscape images with some music to go with it. This was just to show us the basics of final cut. We then had a look at the basics on garageband. We didn't get to use it at this stage but our teacher showed us all about it. As me and Amber were away on the day everyone else made their own short sequences we used another students when making our music in garageband. Garageband seemed pretty simple to use and there is a variety of music which can be used when making out thriller. We didnt spend much time on making the music for our sequence but what we did make was ok for our first attempt. I think when making our thriller music, it will need some deep thought into and will take quite a while as there are so many options of music and intrumentals. Below is our sequence and music.

Jade and Rach

We started our thriller sessions by being introduced to two new programmes needed inorder to create our sequence. The first of these programmes was final cut. On this we learnt how to import, cut and edit images and videos and how to add music over the top. We attempted to create a short title sequence by using landscape images from a short selection. We used many different techniques to make our sequence more interesting and imaginative, for example:
- over lap of images
- fading
- bouncing titles
- changing style and size of font
- cutting images shorter
- copying and pasting to make shots longer
- placed different music over top of images

Garage Band was the second programme introduced.
Thia allowed us to create our own music from putting short clips together. We do have the option to use clips from the computer/internet, or we can create and import our own music. We gained an overall introduction to the programme and got an insight on how to use the tools, for example:
- importing/deleting music clips
- layering the music
- shortening clips using copy and paste
- viewing the soundwaves

All of these will ready us for the construction of our thriller sequence.

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